Prometheus - Fan Rewrite (spoilers)

Topic started by Lnin0 on June 10, 2012. Last post by Surllio 11 months, 1 week ago.
Post by Lnin0 (21 posts) See mini bio

This is one huge spoiler so stop reading if you have not seen the movie.

Elizabeth Shaw flies off into the sunset? Really?

My wife and I saw Prometheus yesterday and walked away both thinking the same thing. The tension peaked when they returned to the ship with a sick Halloway and it went down hill after that. So over some lunch we talked about how to make it better.

A character we loved but felt was flat and under utilized was Theron's. Why not build on the tension between Vickers, David and their father. Vickers was a 'company man' - always doing what was right for by the company and always hoping to impress her father. This plays into the strong "evil company" theme familiar to Alien and Aliens. Theron was already skeptical / jealous of David and her father's plans so why not make this a central theme. Why not see Vickers go from "company man" to realizing she is nothing but a pawn for a bat shit crazy old man.

After the scene were David tells Shaw she is pregnant jump to Vicker and David confronting each other again. This time Vickers learns David purposely infected Halloway and the news of Shaw along with David's plans to bring her back to Earth.

Instead of the timid Shaw over powering two people and performing an operation on herself we see Vickers save her (I won't even mention how dumb it is that Meridith Vickers has a male only operating robot on her private escape pod). This would be much more believable than the mousy Shaw going rambo and its starts showing Vickers change of allegiance while still remaining a strong character.

Now her confrontation with her father is even more powerful and can really flesh out her bitterness and realization that he has only ever cared about himself above even mankind. We also agreed it was stupid to use Guy Pearce in this roll but always show him in makeup. The intro video should have been of the real Guy Pearce. I mean, if you can do a hologram letter you can surely give yourself a face lift in it. It would make seeing the 'old' Guy Pearce that much creeper.

Now skip to Shaw running back to the Prometheus as the derelict ship takes off. When Vickers sees all this she has an epiphany realizing her action have probably ended the human race. She is in agreement to crash the derelict ship but the captain, being a gentleman, forces Vickers into the escape pod.

With both females on the planet running from the crashing derelict ship we reverse the rolls. Nobody cares about Shaw anyway plus it's a prequel so nobody is expecting anyone to live. Shaw gets crushed and the audience smirks...which is more of a reaction than you get killing off Vickers who suddenly turned into a running scared mouse. Instead, by keeping Vickers alive and strong at the end you can do two things better.

You can have an actual believable and epic fight between Vickers and the space jockey (with Vickers prevailing in a similar manner since that is the setup). A real boss fight would be much better than the anti-climactic crashing of the space ship and a mousy Shaw going toe to toe with the space jockey.

Secondly, when the fight is over David can deliver his same lines to Vickers. How much more powerful is this now that it is his "sister". Vickers enters the derelict to retrieve David....or does she. She is carrying the flame thrower and torches David to a crisp while delivering some witty line, "I'd rather die alone on this rock".

Post by dezvous (92 posts) See mini bio

I try to avoid thinking about how I could change something that is never going to change. It's just a lesson in futility. Couldn't something always be better? I love this movie, and recognize that there are plenty of things that could be better, but so could there be great changes made to Alien.

Post by mmgreenmms (2 posts) See mini bio

@Lnin0 said:

Instead of the timid Shaw over powering two people and performing an operation on herself we see Vickers save her (I won't even mention how dumb it is that Meridith Vickers has a male only operating robot on her private escape pod). This would be much more believable than the mousy Shaw going rambo and its starts showing Vickers change of allegiance while still remaining a strong character.

I think that the operating table was meant for old man Weyland. The movie did a terrible job to even wink at this. I don't like it when a movie holds your hand to explain things but this movie went out of its way to obscure stuff like this...

Post by dezvous (92 posts) See mini bio

I thought it was fairly obvious it was intended for Weyland. After all, they reveal he's on the ship immediately following that scene. Still though, first time I saw it, I didn't even realize they showed the worms mucking around in the black goo so I was left wondering where they came from when they mutated into the hammerpede things.

Post by Surllio (88 posts) See mini bio

There are quite a few unrealized story points in the movie, and several that felt just like bad decisions.

I hold to my statements (posted elsewhere). The first hour and a half is exactly what you'd expect, minus a few missed beats, the last thirty minutes is a jumbled mess that plays more like a TV series finale than a movie climax. The movie's tension was dropping after the death of Halloway, but the atmosphere totally just drops when Weyland shows up on screen towards the end. The tripy "run for your life" feeling just stopped, and it was almost like even Ridley Scott stopped trying for the later scenes.

A few things I felt should have been different.

1: Too many crew members. Horror films thrive on the feeling of dread, which comes from when the numbers start to dwindle. However, 17 crew members that don't really die one by one but drop in droves doesn't build the feeling of dread.

2: Too many monsters. Seriously, the black ooze and its effects were good enough. Let the mystery build. Instead, it seemed like everything was out to get them. Even the engineer who I couldn't honestly tell was mad because David said the wrong thing, mad because man was trying to play God, or just mad they woke him up.

3: On the note of too many crew members this one stems. We had two crew members get infected by different means. One for emotion beats, one for monster killing beats. Why couldn't this have been the same character? I mean, did we have to get the stereotypical "scared scientist" guy to become the killing machine after Halloway was progressing. Killing Halloway felt unneeded, as he could have served as your monster, which plays on a stronger emotional cord than guy we didn't really care about. To know the monster is your lover has to be a hard thing to deal with.

4: Vickers. Seriously, she had an interesting character, a predictable arch, and well, she was hard to take in as she was severally under developed and under utilized.

I liked the movie for what it was, but at the same time, it had some serious flaws. The screen play was by a TV writer, and it showed.

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US Release June 8, 2012
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